So, I just want to get this out of the way right off the bat: characters do internal monologues all the time. This is not “awkward exposition” or “info dumps”. It’s oftentimes how both visual and written artists express subtext that cannot be conveyed due to lack of actually SEEING things happening, so you must be told. Ship has information she does not currently wish to share with Alan. Information that, if he were a bit more savvy, could compel her to share. She is recounting the mistakes she made with her previous master. Mistakes that got her locked away for over 100 years. It’s an important reflective moment. Where this all will lead? Well, jump on the Patreon. You just might find out sooner that way. 😉
Talk has been floating around, partly due to my bringing it up, that we may seek other methods to fund future endeavors. With that in mind, I am trying to figure out how to finance the last few pages of Chapter 2 of Mocaccino Gang. It will be part of our debut slate of comics at DriveThru Comics, along with BGR: “The Weight of the Galaxy” and the first two chapters of Peppermint Saga (the “prime” series). The idea being that if I can generate enough book sales from online ordering (you will have your choice of print or digital in most cases where there are 24 pages or more), we will commission future chapters.
Whew. Ok, see you next week when we debut our next Chapter: “Project: Wacko”! Issue 2 cover on Wednesday should pique your interest 😉
~Mace
“I need to work on this one a little bit…”
That’s ominous. If she’s looking to change him from the onset, then that doesn’t bode well.
(forgot to log in earlier – sorry, Mace)
Okay, I’m wondering if the light is on “The Clapper” or if Ship is using magic. I could totally see someone trying to replicate that after seeing her doing this.
In other news: Boobies! Might be our last view of them for a while, so it’s nice of them to show up and say “Farewell.”
Spoiler alert: Chapter 2 leads with blowjob and “Thai massage” in the shower, so, not quite farewell just yet. XD
Oh! The light … I was wondering what was the clapping for.
This is a lovely way to end the chapter. You’re letting us know that Ship isn’t planning anything malicious while he’s asleep and letting us know that all’s right in the world right now.
There’s an interesting paradox here. Both parties definitely needed the sexual release here so they wasted no time in going at it like weasels. At the same time, they don’t really know each other real well, and Ship is clearly planning on taking things slow. Next step: holding hands in public.
It takes an unusual set of circumstances to marry “kinky sex right away” with “taking things slow and easy,” but I think you’re pulling it off.
I will cop to the fact that “taking it slow” means “not fucking Alan until his eggs crack” more than it means cute stuff like that. The next chapter leads with a slightly more casual sex act. XD
Also, more or less that she’s not going to drop the “L” word on him too prematurely, unless that word is actually “lesbians”. In which case Alan is probably perv enough to be down with that.
The reason it was an awkward exposition dump wasn’t the thoughts or the exposition info itself, it was the timing. She was getting busy with Alan and dumps a bunch of info on the reader when the focus is more so on their new and blooming connection, which sort of breaks up the story for the sake of “have info!”.
Internal monologue and exposition dumping is fine, totally encouraged (!) but the first one just had a really awkward timing for the action on the page.
This time around it was perfect though. Action had calmed down, Alan was asleep and she explains some backstory to the readers while she’s slowly going to bed. Really slow, calm and nice way to fade the end out in a natural way while providing important info.
With that bit of explanation out of the way:
THIS IS ADORABLE, SWEET, CUTE AND DELICIOUS! I’m so jealous of Alan, though really not his lack of brightness. That kid could use a couple of common sense and logic classes 😛
Ahhhh, Ship’s the adorable-est of all! And Alan’s being quite cute in his sleep.
Tag mention thingamajig (still need a name for this x.x)
Genie love – because no one can love more intensely, more fiercely or more passionately than an all powerful being. Also a very good reason not to emotionally hurt them, I have a feeling they take vengeance on a scale humans might not even be able to comprehend considering our compared life spans x.x
Let the record show that all people bitching about the thought exposition are male. It’s not just for the sake of “have info”. Women’s brains work on an entirely different order than male brains during sex. They think about, and remember things in that moment. Men, on the other hand, become fixated on it. If I wanted to put a “have info” moment, then Ship would have thought some non sequitur such as thinking about inventorying the contents of her bottle, or how what she is doing relates to the Genie Code. On several occasions she makes references to Roland, Alan’s great grandfather, and this is something front-and-center on her mind before, during and after the sex. She’s like “welp, that was fast, but I can still slow down again. Remember Ship: he’s not Roland. He’s not the one you loved.” (Not yet ;p) but people don’t follow the MLA handbook when they think. They don’t format it according to “The Lively Art of Writing”. It’s a seeming non sequitur on purpose.
Wait… are you saying you’re a girl?
And did you just ignore all my explanations and reasoning in favor of “female brain works differently therefore I’m right”?
Not trying to start a discussion here or anything, I’m just genuinely confused as to what’s happening, and I’m not a big fan of having my arguments pushed aside in favor of “I have 1 argument and I say it’s good enough without further back up therefore I win this” statements.
Not a girl, but I do share the feminist viewpoint that it’s not ridiculous to think that women think about things during sex. See PrettÃo’s comment below this one, as well. She’s commenting on the conversation, but somehow it didn’t get linked to this thread.
To me it’s not about feminist or whatever viewpoint. People, male and female, tend to be rather absorbed in sex when it’s enjoyable and having your mind float off to some distant memory of your emotional feelings for some other person you know is long gone just seems awkward with that in mind.
As for Prettio’s comment, I believe I already covered that? Awkward timing simply means “find a better point in time to bring up that info, those facts and that background”.
Prettio’s comment was also the very first comment, before Uncola Man and myself, so it’s not strange that it’s sort of floating off by itself underneath.
I think it’s very reasonable to let one’s mind wander after sex, the way that Ship is doing. Alan isn’t exactly present himself, after all. As far as earlier, during sex… every series, no matter how good, needs to have some info-dumps before things settle down.
I’m pretty sure that Prettio’s post was in response to an excised comment by someone else.
Ship is the main character of the story, aswell as Alan. So I think people should know that sometimes Ship is going to think or remember things that will need to be writen in the comic so readers can understand why she acts one way or another, or information that is going to be important because things will happen in next episodes related to what she’s thinking or going through at the moment.
I think I’m the one who started the “information dump” debate here, by commenting on Ship’s thinking back to Roland for a moment during sex. I’m perfectly fine with “info-dumps” like this, especially at the start of a comic, I’m greatly enjoying this comic, and I’m sorry if I suggested otherwise.
Not unless you passive-aggressively logged in under a false name that day. Nobody is suggesting ANYONE said they didn’t like the comic. I just don’t like legitimate anons (not you, RandomAnon, you’re fine) jumping in and sniping the comic with comments that sound, on the surface, to be mysoginistic. Talking that way is a one-way train ticket to Ban Town. However, I talked it over with a few more people behind the scenes, and I realize that is not really the case here. But I catch a whiff of that shit, and my hackles go up.
Sir, you are awesome. I had no idea that there were [“Inappropriate”? I don’t know the right adjective] comments being made here at all, and that is because of your diligence.